Alhena Ink Star
Nombre de messages : 206 Location : Glasgow Date d'inscription : 14/04/2008
| Sujet: Fragment #1 - Day 27 Dim Déc 21, 2008 10:35 pm | |
| Sunday, December 21st 2008 in Glasgow The phone rings. I rush out the shower, and jumps on the poor object. "Yes?! Hello!" "Steve, it's Paul." "Oh. Hi, Paul." I can't help but sound disappointed. "You alright?" "Yeah, I think so. You?" "Yeah." He stays silent. Me too. What can we say anyway? That we're desperate for some news of Charlie? We both know that. That we don't have any news whatsover? We know that too. That we start getting worried for their dad, Sir Collomb. We already said that not that long ago. There is nothing to say. Nothing more. We stay there for a little while, hearing each other's breathing on the phone. And then, suddenly, Paul speaks again. "Listen, Steve, I... I'm going back to France for a week. For Christmas." Christmas? What about it? "Oh ok." "I know what you must be thinking Steve, but my brother Daniel and his family are coming all the way to my parents' house, and... Well, anyway, I don't think Charlie would want us to stop living because what's happening." "Sure, Paul, whatever. Give my wishes to your family." "Are you going to Inverness later this week?" "Inverness? Why would I go to Inverness?" "Er... Well, to see your parents, I guess." "No. They'll do what they want, I'm staying here. In Glasgow. In the apartment. Just in case." "Er, ok. Well, hum, bye then." "Yeah, bye."
Just in case. | |
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Mesarthim Ink Star
Nombre de messages : 302 Date d'inscription : 09/04/2008
| Sujet: Re: Fragment #1 - Day 27 Dim Déc 21, 2008 10:57 pm | |
| I think it's a very strong start for this character. Somehow, two simple things, the title and that last sentence "just in case" show how desperate he is, how much he loves her. I really liked this very much. | |
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Altaïr Ink Star
Nombre de messages : 160 Age : 36 Location : Paris Date d'inscription : 09/04/2008
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Mesarthim Ink Star
Nombre de messages : 302 Date d'inscription : 09/04/2008
| Sujet: Re: Fragment #1 - Day 27 Lun Déc 22, 2008 1:29 am | |
| I need to add (how could I forget??): he is SO sexy | |
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